1. ha! I like this a lot
2. The first phrase may not be needed.
3. As clever as it is, I’m trying to justify the absence of sentence closures… yes, I think the irony in that works quite well.
4. You know this implies that Jesus, had he been married, would have been a crummy housemate. True, I think.
5. Shorten the title – maybe even to “Newlywed Carpenter” since it is about him really.
-Anne D.
* This story is copyrighted to Camille Renshaw.
About the AuthorANNE DOOLITTLE is a graduate of the M.F.A. writing program at Bennington College and has a Masters degree in Education from Vanderbilt. Her poems have appeared in Boston Reveiw and on-line at Grepoetry, Conspire, and Zuzu's Petals Quarterly.
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