1. ha! I like this a lot

2. The first phrase may not be needed.

3. As clever as it is, I'm trying to justify the absence of sentence closures... yes, I think the irony in that works quite well.

4. You know this implies that Jesus, had he been married, would have been a crummy housemate. True, I think.

5. Shorten the title - maybe even to "Newlywed Carpenter" since it is about him really.

-Anne D.

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